Thursday, April 28, 2011

Playwrights Project Scene 1 for Feedback



Joseph B.

per. 4

4/21/11

Why Me?


Characters: Demetri Douglas Ybarra - Mexican, 9 yrs. old, short black hair, heavyset, independent, also known as D

Elizabeth Rose - Beautiful, White, D’s mother,


Dr. Jeffer - Deep voice, almost apologetic

Rosa - foster mother of Demetri, not a major character, Mexican lady, in her 30’s, red and black hair.


Officer Greg - White male, in his uniform, black facial hair, 5’11, deep voice

Setting: In the living room, it’s about 3:30 p.m., sunny day
At Rise: D is at the door just about to enter from school as the phone rings. he is wearing his backpack and after hears the phone rushes to the phone. The living room is one of the biggest rooms of the house.
Background: D’s father has been in the hospital due to his cancer. D has a close relationship with his father and is upset that mother Elizabeth wont let D see his dad. Elizabeth won’t let him visit his father because he is just getting worse and she doesn’t want D to see him looking like that. This does cause a bit of conflict, but is the best for everyone.

D:

[D is on the other side of the door. There is a sound of keys and as D is opening the dorr the phone rings. ]

Oh snap!

[D runs through the door rushing to the phone.]

Hello?

Dr. Jeffer:

[Has a deep, apologetic tone to his voice.]

Hello is this the Ybarra residence? This is Dr. Jeffer.

D:

[Confused look on his face]

Oh yes, yes sir. This is D, Mr. Ybarra is my dad. How is he doing? Is he o.k.?
Dr. Jeffer

[Same voice]

Well, actually that is what I called to talk to talk about. But, is there anyone else I can talk to? Your gaurdian or someone along those lines, because you do know information about a patient is confidential.

D

No, but I am his son sir.

Dr. Jeffer

Well son, I am so sorry to tell you this, but your father past about five minutes ago. Please notify your mother and again son I apologize for your loss.

D

[In awe, and then blows up and throws the phone. The phone complete shatters and a piece cuts his arm.]

No!
Dr. Jeffer

[sympathetic, but not able to finish his sentence.]

Wai...............

D

[Angry, he doesn’t like to cry, but since no one wherre a couple tears rolled down his cheeck.]

No! Why? God, why? Dad I love you, don’t die please don’t die...

[Wipes his tears and sits on the couch]

God why did you take my father away from me? Huh? You have no reason I want him, I miss him already!

[He stands up, his blood smeared with blood and tears. D grabs his backpack and storms to his room.]


THIRTY MINUTES LATER...


Elizabeth

[She just came home from work, exhausted. Then she walks in to his room with D sitting on his bed with a blank stare]

D! D are you home? D? Oh hey, I guess you heard?

D

Why mom, why? I couldn’t at least see him once?

Elizabeth

He was just getting worse sweetie, I didn’t want you to see him like that.

D

[Angy tone in his voice]

That’s my dad, I think I am old enough to choose if I want to see him! He’s dead now mom! Dead....

Elizabeth

Don’t raise your voice at me son it was for your own good! We all are suffering of your father’s loss!

D

[Left the room after he spoke]

Well now he’s gone Mom, but at least you got to see him right?

Elizabeth

[she sinks her head into her arms and cries.]







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Wednesday, April 20, 2011

Testing Tips, Strategies, and Plays Reflection


I am super nervous about the CST's that everyone has to take. Although I know many steps and ways to answer a question I don't know, I think there will be too many questions that like that in History and Biology. I hope I do well in English, and I know I will do well in Math. If there was a way to study I would, but I hope I just don't stress out during the tests. Other than that everything is O.K. I will try my hardest and do as best as I can do, what else can I do?

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Monday, April 18, 2011

My Feelings about the Upcoming CSTs


I know California State Testing is big test for a student and their school. They are BIG and SCARY! I'm my previous tests I always scored high in mathematics. I was always above in English, and I am not afraid for this year's test. This year I am worried about the science portion of these tests. I don't think I have prepared myself all year as I have all my other classes. I know these test scores are looked at when applying for colleges, but I hope that I do good on all of them. I am very nervous, but maybe I can do something to prepare myself.

Free Choice Blog Post


Judging is done daily by everyone. A person's first response to an incident is to judge based on that incident. I'm not saying that this is good or bad, but why not just take it for what it is? Judging can cause a perception to be the total opposite of the actual fact. To good or bad. Although, people's jobs are to judge. For example, judges, jury, etc. So, even though it is necessary sometimes judging should not occur all the time. It can break or create wrong friendships. So try not to determine if something is good or bad, but move on and see the whole circumstance.

Thursday, April 14, 2011

Playwrights Project Inspired by Music Paragraph


In Ms. Priester’s class today, Mrs. Olivia had the whole class listen to music to help inspire us to write a play write scenario. At first, I thought it would be weird and awkward, but it ended up being different. While listening to the music, I closed my eyes. While I was writing, I compared the music's tone to a real life occurrence basing it to the music. Afterward, I felt as if my play would be great and the music influence was a great idea. Using music to inspire creative writing was a wonderful experience and had a great impact on my work.

Wednesday, April 13, 2011

UnGoogleable Website Evaluation


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Tuesday, April 12, 2011

Playwrights Project 12-Line Scene

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UnGoogleable Research Paper Website Selection Reflection


How did you select quality websites to use as sources for your research paper? Today in class, I chose a few websites that to gather information on my topic question. To search for websites, I looked on the new searching engines first, and then saw that it had much accurate information, the author listed, and the date. When I found a website related to my focus question, I checked on all these critiques, and I went by my chart. I knew some of the websites I found were unacceptable because they had many ads and mostly pictures. I know the websites I selected are good because they fit the above-grade level section. Tomorrow, I expect that Ms. Priester will congratulate me.

Monday, April 11, 2011

Third Quarter Awards Review


On Friday we had an awards assembly in the auditorium. This assembly was held by our principle and many of the staff and teachers were there because they each gave special awards away. The actual ceremony was sort of long, but at the end pizza was provided to the ones who got an award. During the assembly I received two awards. One was for getting a 4.0 and another was for being the student f the quarter. For achieving a 4.0 I was given two- hundred dollars. I was very pleased about this. The awards assembly in general was alright, because I guess they aren't typically fun. I can't wait until the next one because I will again receive two- hundred dollars.

Friday, April 8, 2011

UnGoogleable Research – What I Already Know


My focus question is “is 2012 going to destroy all of mankind?”. I already know there are a variety of people that believe in it and many that don't. I also know the reason for this event even actually being possible or though of was the fact that the Mayans that created the calendar for many years stopped on a date in 2012. Additionally, I discovered that these opinions and perspective are also all based on religions which can make bias information on 2012. By doing research, I hope to learn more information and different views on what people actually think 2012 will actually stop all mankind.

Wednesday, April 6, 2011

“Switch” Play Audience Member Experience


Today I went to go see the play "Switch." This play was based on foster youth and their lives. It spoke of all the dilemmas that occur when you are in the system and how the system itself works. It is really inspiring to achieve, and to those that are not in our position it is very touching. The actors were very good and actually made their character in each scene. I am glad I was able to go and I thank not only the teachers for taking us but the authors that created such a great play. I think it would be cool if my story was told in a play.

Tuesday, April 5, 2011

UnGoogleable Research Paper – Website Evaluation


I interviewed three individuals to find a solution to my dilemma. My dilemma is a question, and that question is how can you tell if a website is a good resource for writing a research paper? My first volunteer was my staff. His response was first accessibility. He thinks if everyone can access sites that meet their academic need it is capable of being a good resource for a writing research paper. My second client was my social worker. She stated that it is better if the site is current or has been recently updated. Other than the time effecting the credibility so would the authors. The authors are important because if they have no related background than their information might not be as reliable. My last volunteer was an upperclassmen that goes by the name of Radford. He replied and said if the information's sources are cited and if its URL looks accurate. For example, it says .org at the end. When I do research I will now use these guidelines to keep my web searching on the right track.

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Monday, April 4, 2011

UnGoogleable Graphic Organizer

Homonyms Poems


I can’t wait for the new school year to start

My favorite part of last year was right before school, the walking part

I remember the scent of the morning dew

And when the wind blew by my face I would do as I always did do

I looked down at the road, and I did not know what was ahead of me

I could hear someone in my presence ahead, so I stepped on a wood rail steadily

I had to balance my weight and then I jumped off and finished my hike

I did this all week whether the weather was good or bad, and I never rode a skateboard or bike

This whole year I plan to walk, but not only to school, but after

I do not know where I was headed; I just followed the breeze which carried laughter

I saw about four people, two, and then no one was in my view and I felt alone

And that was my que to turn around and go home.